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The night was young, and Will Chandler's brow was furrowed. He was fixated on adjusting his necktie in front of the bedroom mirror, and was panicking quite a bit. Tonight was his first formal date with his six-year boyfriend. Before Will was enlisted in the army, they had been in high school, and never had a chance to go on a fancy date. Then, for four years, he was overseas. Finally, at long last, the two had settled down into a small but cozy home in a wooded area. Will had wanted a home by the sea, but Peter had won it over with the argument that seaside homes were far more expensive. It was impossible to argue with that.
His fingers fumbled with the tie for roughly another minute before he started muttering to himself. He gave up and exhaled deeply, running his fingers through his newly short hair. It had grown to a rather long length in the time that he'd been back from the army, and he needed to make sure it looked absolutely perfect. That's when he heard a creak, and the door opened to reveal his boyfriend, Peter, already fully dressed, and looking quite dapper. Will's eyes widened for a moment and he bit his lip to hide a smirk. He'd never seen Peter looking so dashing. The corners of Peter's lips twitched upward slightly.
"Dear, you appear to be having trouble with your tie," He said strongly, and Will simply nodded, looking down at his tie, loose around his neck. Peter laughed softly, flipping his hair out of his eyes and  walking over to Will. Their eyes met, and Will allowed himself to be completely entranced by his handsome lover for the first time in years. Keeping direct eye contact with Will, Peter grasped the knot and tail of the tie, pulling tightly on the tail end and sliding it through the knot. He might have even pulled it a bit too tightly, but Will didn't notice. He didn't have time to notice, because suddenly, Peter yanked on the tie, catching Will off guard. His blue eyes went wide as he was pulled into a passionate kiss, Peter's lips moving softly against his. All the anxiety he had been harboring about the upcoming date was fading into pure euphoria. When was the last time they'd kissed like this? Will didn't even think he could remember.
Peter let go of the tie, letting his hands find their place at Will's hips. Both men's heartbeats quickened, and Will let his hands run through Peter's soft brown hair, which was still slightly wet from his recent shower. Will smiled through the kiss, biting softly on Peter's lip. This caused Peter to grunt, and he pulled away from the kiss, pushing Will forward onto their bed. Stay chill man! Will ordered himself, eyes widening once again as suddenly Peter was on top of him, gripping his hands, their fingers interlocked. The man's eyelids were closed slightly with lust, and he leaned in close to Will's face as if about to kiss him... when a soft smirk played at the edge of his mouth and he chuckled.
"I'm sorry..." He murmured, his lips so close to Will's that he could almost touch them, "But we need to go."
Will's heart sank, and his wide eyes grew darker. He definitely wanted to go on this dinner date, but they'd never seemed this close to actually having sex until this very moment, and he felt like it had all gone to waste. But Peter pecked him quickly on the lips and grabbed his tie again, pulling Will up to a sitting posion and straddling his crotch. Will's breath was quick and short to go with his staccatto heartbeat as Peter leaned in and whispered in his ear.
"But I promise you..." He murmured, stroking Will's ruffled hair, "There'll be more."
And with that, Peter lept off the bed, smirking at his disgruntled lover. He had to hold back a laugh at how absolutely adorable he looked, all flustered like that. Will's dark hair was in a ruffled mess, and his blue eyes were wide, staring up at Peter like a begging puppy.
With a final laugh before he left the room, Peter spoke as he adjusted his coat, "Fix up your hair. I'll meet you in the car."
And as he blinked, coming to terms with what had just happened, Will couldn't resist a smile. Only Peter could manage to fluster him enough to make him lose his cool, and he was repeatedly struck with a single magnificent thought as he rose from the bed, fixed his hair and walked out the door.
I'm going to get laid tonight.
Wow, I suck at titles.

Either way, moving on to the prompt:
Imagine your OTP getting ready for a formal event. Person A’s tie isn’t tightened enough and Person B fixes it for them. Then Person B pulls Person A by the tie in for a kiss and, just as it’s starting to get good, smirks and mutters that they have to leave. Person A is left with ruffled hair, red cheeks and a whispered promise of more in their ear.


So like, I saw that on tumblr and had NO CHOICE but to write something up with it and hsjgdjkljhgkhlj damn I think it came out good for a short drabble.

I hope you enjoy my random bullshit.

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The first thought that came to mind was Blaine and Kurt from Fox's show Glee. They are so similar to those characters, it's scary. Well, how they were in the beginning. I like the chemistry that's displayed between Will and Peter right from the beginning, no hesitation. Your writing style is really natural, and has good flow. There are no awkward phrases or parts in the story. Your use of description was tasteful, there wasn't too much and there wasn't too little. You knew when to stop. You were really good at showing the lust between the characters. The reader could feel how much the characters wanted the love making to happen. Over all, it was beautifully written, with an interesting story line and characters. I definitely want to read more of your work!
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Electrispaz Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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fabulouslyDashing Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
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VagabondMike Nov 22, 2012  Student Writer
I think this is a really good use of an OTP prompt, but I have a small nitpick to make. Punctuation with quotations is a really weird grammatical thing to perfect.

Instead of writing it like:
"It was terrible..." He groaned, "She got eaten by a wildebeest."

It should come out like:
It was terrible..." he groaned. "She got eaten by a wildebeest."

It's not a big deal, and it doesn't bother me, but I figured you'd appreciate some advice. I like it. I can't tell what fandom this is for, though.
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fabulouslyDashing Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh? Well I actually thought it was the opposite way. Like, I swear I learned it in school that you always capitalize the pronoun but a'ight I shall remember that. ^^ Just looked it up. You were right!

And that's because it's not fanfiction, silly.
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VagabondMike Nov 22, 2012  Student Writer
I actually made that same mistake throughout my fan fiction and decided to thumb through the entire thing to fix it. I probably didn't need to do that, but whatever.

Grammar is a strange thing, sometimes.
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fabulouslyDashing Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah I know, right?
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